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A Poem from a Letter by ~vampirexXxwitch:iconvampirexXxwitch:



Allow me the pleasure to judge you
As you do with everyone
And point out your faults

You can’t be honest
Or in love
Don’t deny it, for it is true

I’m sorry I thought to write you
It took so long to write back
That I thought you could be replaced

The euphoria is a lie
Though I wanted to be honest
I can’t

The roller coaster of emotion
That we were on..
I went insane

I want my heart to beat
For me alone
You said nothing could replace me
You must mark that out

My nimble tongue is done raving
About how you are not kind
Though the page of ‘I love you’
Is heart binding and not true
:iconvampirexxxwitch:

Author's Comments

For :iconsimplypoetry:'s form contest.

I used a letter I hoped I had lost, but while cleaning my room, had found.

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:iconkira-karix-chan:
Once again I will say... PURDY. UR POETRY IS PURDY.

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"Sometimes I lie awake at night, and I ask, 'Where have I gone wrong?' Then a voice says to me, 'This is going to take more than one night.' "
-Charlie Brown

I'm Sari in ~Cartoon-Obsessions!
:iconkira-karix-chan:
:boogie:

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"Sometimes I lie awake at night, and I ask, 'Where have I gone wrong?' Then a voice says to me, 'This is going to take more than one night.' "
-Charlie Brown

I'm Sari in ~Cartoon-Obsessions!
:iconartemis-cade:
i think i know what you mean and if its what i think i can completely relater to you

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Touching's not the only way to feel
:iconvampirexxxwitch:
I'm sorry that you can relate, its a very terrible feeling.
:iconartemis-cade:
yea well what does not kill us makes us stronger

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Touching's not the only way to feel
:icontashagladwell:
This is a very interesting poem, and I feel a lot of strong emotions in it, so well done on that! It's such a key point in a great deal of poetry to get so much said in so few lines. :) You have responded very well to the prompt, but I also think it would be nice to see some more punctuation and line breaks. I must confess, I love to use punctuation and line breaks to the extreme in poetry, so I think this prompt could be a nice excuse to really go wild with it! Maybe experiment with it, see how it goes and whether it improves or not! Nice work :)

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"No one has ever gained wisdom by studying material that only reinforced their own predetermined ideas." - Jim Marrs

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